*p.s. Before the start, I'm really sorry to neil about misunderstanding the homework.
I watched Adora Svitak's speech from TED. In this video, she said that adults can learn from the children and she disagree with call children childish. I really agree with her opinion. Because children have good abilities , imagination , ambition and they will be the leaders in the future. Then they will make the world better.
The first thing why I agree is children have much imagination. They have illimitable imagination and they think everything is possible. They have clean mind. Second, they have many abilities. They have much possibilities. If they developed, they can show us more abilities in the future. So we shouldn't call them 'childish'. Third, children are our future. We should help them enough. And they'll do same things as like us.
In coclusion, adults shoud learn from the children and they should be mutual. And then, this world will be better in the future. Doesn't it?
FINAL ESSAY ASSIGNMENT
12 years ago
Remember to check for simple mistakes in your writing (spelling and easy grammar, especially). Also, make sure you check that all of your "sentences" are actually sentences. For example, what you have written as your 3rd and 4th sentences should really be just one sentence joined with "because".
ReplyDeleteYou write about imagination and children's abilities. I think your ideas are good, but you have no examples to explain these thoughts or to show why they are reasonable.